Annabeth O'Connell

[Annabeth O'Connell]

ABOUT YOU

Player Name (or name you wish to be called on the board): Esmée
Do you solemnly swear that you are above the age of 13? I solemnly swear I'm above the age of thirteen, I am fifteen years old
What is your past experience in roleplaying? (may include years of experience or past boards and characters. If none, say beginner) Well, I started roleplaying seven years ago on a Dutch site, I'm not sure what one but it was practically playing Winx Club on chat xD I RPG on proboards for 4 months now.
How did you hear about us? (if from an ad, please state where, if you remember) I'd search for good RPG sites on Google and I found this one
Did you read the rules? Yes I did, Dobby's sock

ABOUT YOUR CHARACTER

Character Name: Annabeth O'Connell
Character Age: Eleven


{If student} Year: 1st
{If Student} Preferred House: Gryffindor or Ravenclaw
(If Student) Best Classes: History of Magic, Defense against the Dark Arts
{If Student) Worst Classes: Astronomy, Divination

Appearance:

[/b] Annabeth usually wears her hair down. When she isn't in uniform she likes to wear quirky t-shirts, loose fitting tanks, shirts, dresses, ripped skinny jeans, leggings and oversized sweaters.
•Eye Color: Light blue
•Hair: Middle brown, long, straight
•Skin Tone: Caucasian
•Height: Kid-sized
•Body Type: Skinny
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Celebrity Claim: Kaya Scodelario

Strengths:

Weaknesses:

Quirks/Habits:

Favorite...

[/b] The Beatles
•movie: How the grinch stole christmas
•book: Magical Theory
•food: Chocoballs
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Personality :
Annabeth struggles with making friends since she finds it hard to open up. She's also very shy and quiet, but when you get to know her you see a very cheerful girl who loves to joke around. Annabeth is ambitious and stride to be perfect. She knows that's impossible but she still keeps trying. She gets really upset when things don't work out the way she wanted them too. The mainly reason for that is because she doesn't want to disappoint her father. Annabeth often panics about little things and always get in trouble for being curious. She actually gets in danger for figuring things out she shouldn't know. She is very strong willed, she won't give up before she gets what she wants.

Family

[/b] Cecile van der Bilt, 41, squib, alive
Father: Sebastian O'Connell, 44, muggle, alive
Other family members : Charlie van der Bilt, 19, cousin, pureblood, Hufflepuff, alive
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History :
Annabeth was born in Middelburg, Holland. When she was four years old her dad divorced from her mother and moved to England, where he'd met John Welsh. The man he'd later married. Sebastian tried to contact Annabeth but Cecile didn't want to attend the wedding and told Annabeth he'd never wanted to see her again. Annabeth didn't saw her father since then. Her mother is also slightly neglecting her, but doesn't seem to realise. Her mother married four times after the divorce but Sebastian is still a emotional subject. Whenever Annabeth asks about him, her mother interrupts her and tell her it doesn't matter since he doesn't want to see her. The idea of her father hating her really upsets her. Now a days she's working on a plan to find her father to ask him why he doesn't want to see her.

RP Sample :
The class was buzzing with the chatter of students as they entered the room and began greeting their friends. Professor Slughorn was seated at his desk, leaning back and nibbling on some crystallized pineapple. To all the world, it would have appeared that he was not paying attention to anything that was being said. Of course, that was not the case.

Slughorn's finely tuned ear was listening for any interesting tidbits of information that might involve the influential parents of certain students. It must have been a slow news day, though, and he heard very little of interest. He waited a few minutes, trying to hear what the Black boy in the back of the room was saying to his friends. Finally, when he was satisfied that there was nothing to hear and that all the students were in the room, Slughorn sat up and looked around the room.

"Now, then, students," he began, clearing his throat. "Can anyone tell me which parts of the dragon are used in potions? You there... do you know the answer?"

Annabeth raised her hand when professor Slughorn asked. But he didn't let her answer. She'd looked at the boy professor Slughorns was looking at. He was pretty nervous. As far as Annabeth knew he always was, she didn't understand why he was sorted in Ravenclaw though. She'd bite her lip. It's such unfair the professors picks everybody but me. I'd never have a chance to show them what I got, how can I learn if nobody gives me the chance to? well if they won't, I will. And besides that, I'm helping Marcus, a win win situation, right? ''Blood, claw, dung, eyes, hide, horn, liver, scales, teeth and dragonfly thorax, sir'' she answered. But instead of a smile or a nod he'd just stared at her. ''No one asked you anything miss O'Connell.'' Annabeth stared at her feed. ''I'm sorry professor Slughorn, I just wanted to help.''

Anything else? N/A

[Albus Dumbledore]

Hi, and welcome to Up to No Good!

I am guessing that English is not your first language. This is fine, but I just wanted you to clarify a couple of things:

The personality is a bit confusing. You say that she is quiet and shy, but she gets in trouble for being too noisy? That doesn't seem to make sense. Either she is quiet or she is noisy, but she can't be both. I could see her getting in trouble for daydreaming or for not paying attention in class, but not being noisy. Also, the drama queen thing doesn't quite fit, either... maybe she's a worrier or she gets panicked about little things? This would sort of fit with her background. Remember, you want her to be a realistic person. It also seems like you had more you wanted to say at the end of the personality... is there something missing?

Also, with the history, I'd like to hear a little bit more about how she feels about her mother marrying all these different men. And how does she feel about her father?

Please make these changes, and I should be able to accept you.

[Annabeth O'Connell]

Jan 16, 2012 0:14:17 GMT -5 Albus Dumbledore said:

Hi, and welcome to Up to No Good!

I am guessing that English is not your first language. This is fine, but I just wanted you to clarify a couple of things:

The personality is a bit confusing. You say that she is quiet and shy, but she gets in trouble for being too noisy? That doesn't seem to make sense. Either she is quiet or she is noisy, but she can't be both. I could see her getting in trouble for daydreaming or for not paying attention in class, but not being noisy. Also, the drama queen thing doesn't quite fit, either... maybe she's a worrier or she gets panicked about little things? This would sort of fit with her background. Remember, you want her to be a realistic person. It also seems like you had more you wanted to say at the end of the personality... is there something missing?

Also, with the history, I'd like to hear a little bit more about how she feels about her mother marrying all these different men. And how does she feel about her father?

Please make these changes, and I should be able to accept you.

Oops, I'm sorry. I made that just before I went to bed and I was a bit sleepy so I didn't notice it. That noisy was also a typo, I ment curious, I also ment panicking about little things. Thank you. And English isn't indeed my first language, I am Dutch. I change some stuff now.

EDIT: I've changed it. Indeed a lot of typo's, I just downloaded a spelling checker in English, so I shouldn't make that many typo's anymore. And besides that, I promise myself I won't make a character at 12 pm again. Amen.

[Albus Dumbledore]

Thank you. This is fine. You are accepted. I'll send you your Hogwarts Letter.